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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In many countries, there is an ongoing debate about the
freedom
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students
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 should have when choosing their university
subjects
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.
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 some argue that
students
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 should be free to
study
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 any subject they are interested in, others believe that
universities
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 should only allow
subjects
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 with clear practical value,
such
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 as science and technology. In my opinion,
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students
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 should have some
freedom
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 of choice,
universities
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 should prioritise
subjects
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 that benefit both individuals and society. On the one hand, allowing
students
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 to
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subjects
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 they are passionate about can lead to greater personal fulfilment and creativity. When young people
study
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 topics they genuinely enjoy, they are more motivated, work harder, and often achieve better results.
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, many successful entrepreneurs and artists chose unconventional
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 that matched their interests rather than following conventional career paths.
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 not only enhances individual happiness but can
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 lead to innovation in unexpected fields.
On the other hand
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, some argue that governments and
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 should direct
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 towards
subjects
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 that have clear economic and practical benefits, particularly science, technology, engineering, and mathematics (STEM). In an increasingly competitive global economy, countries need highly skilled professionals in these areas to drive technological advancement and economic growth. If too many
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 choose
subjects
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 with limited job prospects, it may result in high graduate unemployment and wasted public resources.
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, guiding
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 towards useful
subjects
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 can benefit society as a whole. In conclusion,
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 it is important for
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 to have the
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 to
study
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subjects
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 they are passionate about, I believe
universities
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 should encourage more
students
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 to pursue
subjects
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 that have clear practical value for the future. A balanced approach, where personal interest is combined with societal needs, would produce both fulfilled individuals and a more productive society.

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task response
For task response, your answer covers both sides and gives your opinion clearly. To get a higher score, add one more very clear real example for each side.
task response
For task response, your ideas are clear and on topic. Try to explain a little more deeply why free choice and useful subjects can work together.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your essay is easy to follow and the order is good. To improve more, use a few more linking words inside body paragraphs to show each step of your thinking.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, each paragraph has one main idea, which is good. To reach a higher band, make the support in each paragraph a bit fuller and more connected to the main point.
task response
For task response, you answered all parts of the question and gave a clear opinion in the introduction and conclusion.
task response
For task response, your ideas are balanced, and both views are explained in a fair way.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, the essay has a clear structure with introduction, two body paragraphs, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your linking words like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' help the reader follow your ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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