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The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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Nowadays, the development of technology has increased rapidly and to a great extent that the whole world cannot survive without
this
.
However
, some people believe that the technology has widened the gap between the rich and the poor, while others argue that closeness between these people are growing.
This
 essay discusses both the viewpoints. On one hand, with the advancements in automation there are many things which cannot be afforded by various groups of people.
For instance
, the minimum cost of an iPhone is around 25000, which is not affordable by middle- and low-class people, while the affluent people can buy these products.
However
, apart from mobiles there are many medicines and treatments which could be costly, but the poverty-stricken people cannot pay for
such
 drugs.
Moreover
, due to the advancements there are many impoverished people who are losing their lives, because the medication was not given within the correct time.
For example
, many young children in my country who are affected by deadly diseases are dying because they are poor and cannot pay high prices for their treatment.
On the other hand
,
this
 elevation in mechanization and computers has been a boon to all the classes of people who are living, because many top organisations whose primary priority are their customers rather than cost.
Although
, there are many electronic gadgets, medicines which has their prices in peaks, but there are other brands of products which are serving similar facilities to satisfy the people.
For example
, the internet cannot be afforded by many people, but the Wi-Fi which is available at railway stations, bus stops and
also
 airports is very much helpful to the local public. In conclusion, according to my viewpoint, the technology has broken the bridge between high -and low -class people to a great extent that presently all the people are enjoying all the facilities that they require.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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