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Some psychologists recommend that to overcome stress in daily life we should do nothing at all for a period of time. Do you agree or disagree?

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In order to effectively deal with
stress
 on a frequent basis, experts in mental health have advised that we remain idle for some time.
This
 essay will state why I disagree with
this
 recommendation because not doing anything can affect our source of livelihood and
also
 our well being. Idleness can negatively affect our financial state. When people decide to abandon their jobs and businesses just because they are trying to avoid
stress
 it impacts their source of income and in most cases they become impoverished.
For instance
, in Nigeria, out of the 85% of poor people 70% are jobless and without any form of livelihood.
Further more
in addition
Furthermore
, the state of poverty which they find themselves only succeeds in increasing their
stress
 and not in anyway abating it. Being inactive can
also
 affect our health for the worst. Engaging in different forms of activities is
also
 a form of exercise and
this
 strengthens our bones and keep us physically fit and healthy.
For example
, a research conducted by the institute of general health and wellness in Nigeria has concluded that physical activity is the
second
 most effective way to achieve a healthy life. Admittedly, we should not overdo it,
however
, from all indications as presented in the statistics it is obvious that living a life of inactivity is an invitation to illness. To conclude, despite the fact that
stress
 can be greatly reduced by taking things easy, I emphatically disagree with the psychologists that advised that
this
stressless
Suggestion
Stressless
stresses
 way of life can only be achieved by doing nothing.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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