Many people believe that money is a good gift for a teenagers while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the world of today, there has been an increasingly popular tendency that people give
money
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for teenagers as they consider it as a reasonable present, while some are against
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trend due to its possible drawbacks. From my perspective, I find the latter
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most agreeable
for several reasons. On the one hand,
money
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may be a suitable gift for youngsters, thanks to some of its benefits. The
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advantage worth mentioning is that
money
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collected from gifts may play an indispensable role in some young students’ lives. In fact, in some cases, students whose families do not provide them with support
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for
their education fee and daily expenses may take advantage of that
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to release their financial burdens. Another benefit of
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act is that according to some research, not only does early exposure to
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help teenagers to understand better about the value of the
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, it
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helps them to start planning their financial budget, which is obviously beneficial their adult life in the near future.
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, children who are allowed to get familiar with
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money
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the money
during their early stage of life seem to have a better understanding and systematic thinking in doing businesses when they grow up, compared to those that are prohibited from touching
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when they were young.
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, there are undeniable drawbacks of giving
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as a gift to
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the youngsters
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of all, by giving
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for them too easily, adults may spontaneously create an illusion that everyone can have a free access to material things, without spending any effort. Indeed,
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will clearly have detrimental effects to their
mind set
a habitual or characteristic mental attitude that determines how you will interpret and respond to situations
mindset
and philosophy of life later on, breeding potential crimes and social evils.
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, young people are often curious and vulnerable. Without a strict control from parents, not only do they spend that amount of
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into useless and unnecessary things advertised on means of media, but they may
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use that in drug-trafficking.
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but not least, some young people have already thought that getting
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as a gift should be their right, and kept asking for more.
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some families can afford it, some may find it out of the question and have to work exhaustedly or go stealing to satisfy their kids’ wants. In conclusion, even though there are some advantages of the trend in which people give
money
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for teenagers as a present, I hold the belief that the trend still has some irrefutable demerits;
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, it should be discontinued in the today’s society.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial responsibility
  • budget
  • save
  • informed spending decisions
  • personal preferences
  • practical and efficient
  • unwanted or inappropriate gifts
  • impersonal
  • emotional value
  • thoughtfulness
  • personal consideration
  • wise financial decisions
  • frivolously
  • lasting memories and experiences
  • educational courses
  • hobby-related equipment
  • long-lasting positive impact
  • fostering interests and skills
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