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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology/ In what ways technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development.

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Interaction among people has been a cornerstone in human development. And with the advent of new technologies, human interaction has been facing a radical change.
Technology
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 has not only made it easier to interact with people, but has
also
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 reduced time in human interactions significantly. I believe the development of
technology
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 has made
positive impact
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a positive impact
 to our interactions. The positive impact of
technology
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 on human interactions and relationships can be felt everywhere. With
technology
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 like
skype
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Skype
 we can interact with people all around the globe and can lead to closeness. Any people can instantly message or call someone from any place around the globe,
this
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 has led to shrinking of
boundries
the line or plane indicating the limit or extent of something
boundaries
 and rich communication between people, without
technology
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 which would not have been possible. Social media
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 as
facebook
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Facebook
 and
instagram
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 have allowed people to share their life in an interesting way.
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 has led to people being actively using and developing
technology
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 for the betterment of human interaction. As with every positive development, there are few negative developments with the use of
technology
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 on human relationships and communication. People are able to use
technology
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 to scold, be rude, verbally abuse others and not face any
repurcussions
a remote or indirect consequence of some action
repercussions
. The relationship maintained through
technology
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 are not quite bonding as face-to-face interactions would be. The
technology
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have
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has thus even led
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 even led to
violiation
a crime less serious than a felony
violations
violation
evolution
 of people's fundamental rights. Overall, considering the increasing use of
technology
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, the positive impacts are more valuable and has saved
significant amount
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a significant amount
significant amounts
 of cost and time of people in maintaining and developing human relationships and interactions.
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 promoting and developing
technology
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 to facilitate human relationships and interactions are the way forward.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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