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When new towns are planned, it is important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays city planning is essential to make a better nation. Few people argue that planner should have
preference
Suggestion
preferred
 to gardens and gym rather than business streets and shopping malls. While others believe that shopping complexes are as important as parks and gyms. I hold the support for a
second
 argument. There are reasons why gardens are considered as the heart of the town.
First
 of all, parks are the best place to go for simple exercise or jogging, It helps people to live healthy and balanced life.
Moreover
, Parks are good spots to familiarise with neighbours.
For example
, wishing morning greets with passers by might lead to conversation and people can socialize with each other.
In addition
, A harmonious relationship between resident helps building a caring and friendly neighbourhood. Other public facilities like a stadium or gym, not only provide space to play sports but
also
 helps to elevate citizen’s mood during the day.  Even though parks and sport facilities provide huge benefit to town, we cannot ignore the importance of shopping malls.
Firstly
, shopping malls is the most convenient place for local resident to buy A to Z of their need.
Besides
this
, It can lead to save the money for the transportation and shipping of goods.
Secondly
, Majorly the costs of products are on the lower side compared to other individual shops.
Besides
this
, malls can provide employment in bulk for various fields
such
 as retail, management and security to local residents. To sum up, Even though
gardens
Suggestion
the gardens
 and sport facilities serves to make people healthy and socially active, shopping malls are equally important in urban planning to provide convenience and jobs opportunities to locals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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