Write an effect essay. Why are young people addicted to social media?

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In modern life, social media is developing fast. It is used by many people all over the world. Social media is especially very popular among the young.
However
, there are many young people who cannot control themselves and are addicted to social media. Addiction to social media has many serious effects, including poor study habits and bad
health
.
First
, addiction to social media makes the youth have bad grades in studies. Because of social media, many students who were excellent students have become bad students. Every day, these students come to class, but they do not focus on studying. While their professors are teaching, they are using cellphones to surf Facebook, Instagram or chat with friends on Messenger. They always check their cell phones every five minutes to see what is going on social media. If the young use social media in classes, how can they listen to the professors and understand what professors are saying?
Moreover
, not only at school, but
also
at home these young students who are addicted to social media do not do exercise or read the new lesson before going to school, because they are busy with social media.
Therefore
, Addiction to social media causes a bad habit in studies. It can change a young person from an excellent student with a bad one. And
last
but not least, using social media too much will have a serious impact on
health
. Because the young are addicted to social media, they will go to bed too late to read news on Facebook or chat with friends. Staying up late is really harmful to the
health
, especially, the brain. If the young do not sleep enough, their
health
will be affected seriously by losing weight or always feeling tired. Their brains
also
will not work effectively and they will be in sleepy condition.
Moreover
, addiction to social media can cause depression in the young. When the young use social media, they will see other people on social media. If the young see other people who are better than them in appearance or talent, they can feel inferior. These young people can envy the people who are more famous or intelligent than them, and they
also
feel ashamed of themselves. They always wonder why they cannot be excellent, talented or beautiful like others.
Therefore
, they feel under pressure, stressed and depressed. These mental problems are very dangerous to the young people because these mental problems cause the young people lose their minds and eventually, choose death. In conclusion,
although
using social media has many benefits in our lives, addiction to social media is not good. It will have awful influences on studying and have bad effects on
health
. In order to avoid being addicted to social media, young people should spend more time playing sports, studying and taking part in activities in schools.
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