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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other type of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Economic
development
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 is the major target for most of the governments. But many people are under the impression that advancements in other fields are
also
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 very important for a
nation
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. Economic
development
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 is the reason a county would have increased jobs, but cultural growth is
also
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 important for a better and satisfied life. A
country
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’s
economy
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 is an important factor for the ruling bodies, because it directly relates to the creation of jobs and
development
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 of the
nation
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. When the
economy
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 grows, there is more money in the market for real estate
development
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, growth of small scale industries and multinational companies.
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 leads to the creation of new jobs in the market, for the youth.
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, if everyone has a job there will be less people dependent on government provided food banks or money.
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Although
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Despite
 the growing
economy
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 is good for a
country
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, many people believe that other fields cannot be neglected. One
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 field is richness of art and architecture, which is essential for the people to have a sense of belonging.
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, India has protected its monuments which are not only making the
country
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 culturally rich, but is
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 increasing tourism in the
country
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.
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 has enhanced satisfaction in everyone’s life because it has added a sense of pride, for one’s
country
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. In conclusion, while the major target of the government of a
country
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 is to achieve better
economy
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, few people believe that
development
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 should
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 follow in other fields as well. In my opinion, to grow as a
nation
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, we should be progressive in all the areas that affect life on a day to day basis. Economic
development
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 is important for monetary benefit, whereas cultural
development
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 is essential to satisfy the soul of a
nation
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.

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