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children should always follow their parents' advice. to what extent to do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#children #parents #advice
The importance of the family role in children's life is obvious for everyone so some people think that children should follow their parents' advice.
However
, others claim that it is not always right. I think the following advice from children in the family depends on their ages and conformities.
at
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At
 the
first
 ages of childhood, children don't know the difference between right and wrong,
for example
, they don't know that fire is dangerous or how impolite
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 affects others. As a practical instance, nowadays the more progress in telecommunication technologies like social media, the more care about children's life is undeniable. Parents usually are aware about
harmful effects
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the harmful effects
 of limitless using of these technologies but children don’t.
Therefore
, for growing personality, children need someone who can talk them friendly and give some advices. On
another hand as
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the other hand, as
the other hand as
other hand as
 they
are becoming more mature
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more becoming mature
are becoming more mature
, they have more responsibility and become mature as well. Because of feeling freedom,
independency
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independence
independent
 and autonomous, they want to make their own decisions. In
this
 situation, parents helping as an adviser on morals and safety can be very useful. Young people don't want anyone to control them and told them how to live, How to behave and, etc.
they
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They
 are grown up and they can decide for
themselves but
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themselves, but
 what makes advices more acceptable is the way parents behave with their children, like a boss or like a friend. In conclusion, I partially agree and in my opinion parents' advices help children to be more careful and cautious in childhood, when they grow up it is time to
live
go away from a place
leave
 whatever they want.

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