You had something delivered to your home. You now realise the person who delivered it damaged something in your home while they were delivering the item. Write a letter to the manager of the delivery company. In your letter: • give details of the delivery • describe what was damaged • say what you would like the manager to do

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Dear Sir/Madam Yesterday, 27 of July, a worker from your company delivered me a wardrobe. It was probably 2 p.m.

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, they did not call me to announce that it would arrive.

As a result

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, I was not at home and my little sister controlled the work. When I came back home I saw that the worker

broke

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had broken

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my wall

from

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the corridor. To be clear, one of the walls has a big hole in it. I think that he was not attentive and probably pushed the wardrobe

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into

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the wall. In brief, you can see it from

the

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apply

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far

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afar

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, it does not look pleasant and irritates the eye.

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, I hope the manager can help me solve

this

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problem. Your company can pay for

constructions

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construction

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or for workers. Let me explain, I do not need money, I just want someone to pay for the damage.

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, I can contribute by paying half of the price. I look forward to hearing from you, Yours faithfully, Daria

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Task Response

Consider providing more specific details about the delivery, such as the delivery company's name or the delivery worker's details, if known.

Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph conveys a single, clear idea for even better clarity.

Writing Tone

The letter maintains a polite and respectful tone, which is appropriate for the situation.

Task Achievement

The letter clearly describes the problem and suggests a reasonable solution.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

168 words

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