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Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day, while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is rare these days to find someone who does not communicate and interact with others through a
cell
 phone or the net as they are widespread throughout society. I believe that the benefits of
this
 development outweigh the drawbacks. One main negative consequence of
this
 development is that people may have become disconnected in relation to conversing with each other face-to-face. People now tend to use their
cell
 phones or the wifi to communicate, but rather than actually speaking, they send a message. Some of the most popular applications are WhatsApp, Facebook Messenger, and Line, all of which encourage messaging. The result of
this
 is that people may lack the benefits of engaging with others in conversation and the closeness
this
 brings. Despite
this
, there are several important advantages as well.
Firstly
, the
internet
 and
cell
 phones mean that people can stay connected,
however
, far away they are from each other.
For instance
, these days, many people live in different countries or go travelling in different countries.
Cell
 phones and the
internet
 mean that parents can easily keep in touch with their children who are on holiday and people who immigrate to live abroad can easily communicate with their loved ones when needed.
In addition
 to
this
, the
internet
 means that people
also
 interact with strangers and increase their knowledge of other cultures because through
such
 things as Facebook, people connect to all sorts of people around the world, becoming friends and
also
 discussing and exchanging knowledge. In conclusion,
although
 a disadvantage of the
internet
 and
cell
 phones is the lack of face-to-face conversation, they have improved the way we can stay in contact with loved ones and exchange ideas with new people. Overall
then
,
this
 is a positive development for society.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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