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The main purpose of public libraries is to provide books, and they should not waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi-tech media such as computer software, videos and DVDs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Library
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The library
A library
 is a platform that
provide
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provides
 the sources of
information
 for people especially
student
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studied
. As due the
developing
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development
developers
developer
 of the technology, some hi-tech media
such
 as computer software, videos and DVDs have been provided in some libraries.
This
 led to different opinions that should the library wastes their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi-tech media. I totally disagreed that hi-tech media service in
library
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the library
libraries
 is a waste as hi-tech media sources are beneficial in storing
information
 and make the learning process or
information
 presentation more interesting. Digital sources are beneficial in storing
information
 in a systematic way which can shorter the time searching.
For instance
, the researcher only has to enter the keyword in specific software for searching related
gen
(genetics) a segment of DNA that is involved in producing a polypeptide chain; it can include regions preceding and following the coding DNA as well as introns between the exons; it is considered a unit of heredity
gene
 and the result will be
displayed in shortly
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displayed shortly
. With
higher storage volume
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the highest storage volume
highest storage volume
a highest storage volume
 of the software, more
information
 can be stored for long term usage and in good condition. It can reduce the workloads of the librarian to protect the book from damage. In additional, digital
media which
Accept comma addition
media, which
 has transferred the
information
 into different forms will make the learning process or
information
 presentation more interesting.
For instance
, the history of a country can be presented in different form
such
 as movie or cartoon which the
information
 can
easily to be delivered
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easily be delivered
 to the receiver. It will give advantage to
reader
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the reader
 or researcher in understanding the gene in different experience. To conclude, the transformation of the library in using digital media can improve searching process, shorten the time consuming and provide convenience to the researcher.

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