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The main purpose of public libraries is to provide books, and they should not waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi-tech media such as computer software, videos and DVDs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Library
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The library
A library
 is a platform that
provide
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provides
 the sources of
information
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 for
reader
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the reader
 or
researcher
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. As due the
developing
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development
developers
developer
 of the technology, some hi-tech media
such
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 as computer software, videos and DVDs have been provided in some libraries.
This
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 led to different opinions that should the library wastes their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi-tech media. I totally disagreed that hi-tech media service in
library
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the library
libraries
 is a waste as hi-tech media sources are beneficial in storing
information
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 and make the learning process or
information
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 presentation more interesting. Hi-tech media sources are beneficial in storing
information
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 in a systematic way which can shorten the time searching. For
instant
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an instant
, the
researcher
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 only has to enter the keyword in specific software for searching related gene and the result will be displayed shortly. With
higher storage volume
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the highest storage volume
highest storage volume
a highest storage volume
 of the software, more data can be stored for long term usage and in good condition. It can reduce the workloads of the librarian to protect the book from damage. In additional, digital media, which has transferred the
information
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 into different forms will make the learning process or
information
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 presentation more interesting.
For instance
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, the history of a country can be presented in different form
such
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 as movie or cartoon which the
information
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 can easily be delivered to the receiver. It will give advantage to
reader
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the reader
 or
researcher
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 in understanding the gene in different experience. To conclude, the transformation of the library in using digital media can improve searching process, shorten the time consuming and provide convenience to the
researcher
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.
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