International entertainers, including sports personalities, often get paid million of dollars in one year. In you view, with widespread poverty in the world, are these huge earnings justified?

The salaries of many singers, dancers and
sportspeople
have increased out of all proportion in recent years, while in places like Sudan people are starving to death. I do not believe that anyone should be able to earn
such
enormous salaries when so many people in the world are living in poverty. One of the factors which should affect what a person can earn ought to be the benefit of a person's
work
to society. It is unreasonable for a famous singer to be able to earn far more from an evening's entertainment than,
for instance
, a medical scientist who develops a new drug which produces a treatment for a common disease. The pop star certainly has value in society, but the value in no way exceeds, or even matches, the value gained from a successful medication.
Secondly
, the
work
done should be paid according to the amount of effort and skill that goes into it. Nobody would deny that a famous person works hard and is
skillful
having or showing knowledge and skill and aptitude
skilful
, yet
such
people do not
work
any harder than thousands of other workers who have no claim to fame. Yet market force is
such
that these superstars can obtain millions of dollars while other unknown people sometimes earn less than they need to survive.
Finally
, it should be possible for governments to
work
together to ensure that the amount of money in circulation should be more equally and fairly distributed.
This
seems only fair given that there is so much suffering. To conclude, it is clear that world poverty is a serious problem and yet the problem could be erased if governments and companies gave more thought to
paying
Suggestion
pay
salaries on a more equitable basis and if they started to contribute more money to those in need.

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