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Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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A great deal larger number of people are turning towards Herbal medicines,
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 some people believe in the inaffectiveness o
f these methods
power to be effective; the quality of being able to bring about an effect
effectiveness
 of curing and a step ahead, some others believe in the worst implications, that these curing methods may cause of. The significant large number of people are adopting the
alternative
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 medicans for fina
ncial re
the branches of medical science that deal with nonsurgical techniques
medicines
asons especially in the poor countries. Inadequate financial resources and lacking of government backing medical support in
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 a countries is resu
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country
general public
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 kind of medical treatments. These treatments do not happen heavy on the patient budget and
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 get patient invol
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getting
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the patient
patients
hologically as if getting treatment and
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 feeling better.
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a large number
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cases, these
alternative
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 medicines show no considerable record of any major fatal implication, that might be a case with other medical treatments while doing surgeries or sometimes witnessed in general cases as well. So,
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 is perhaps another reason, patients are joining in
alternative
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 medic
ines club.
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the alternative medicines club
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, sometimes
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the branches of medical science that deal with nonsurgical techniques
medicines
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any state or process known through the senses rather than by intuition or reasoning
phenomenon
phenomena
nate medicines. Patients complaints about worst converse effects of
alternative
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 medicines . It is
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 obs
er
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ved that self medication is
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 very common with alternate medicines, that made the situation worse. So, to sum up and adding my personal point of view, I believe that alternate medicines can be a cheap method of t
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cheaper
ent if backed by government concerned departments and more research work is put in the field.
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 by educating people about implications of self medications of even alternate medicines and impeaded them of
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such act
made difficult or slow
impeded
s. One solution is more regulation are introduced in
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 new field.

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