You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why he/she would not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ...................,
Dear Shally,
I hope you are in pink
of
your health. In your Change preposition
for
last
letter, you have
mentioned that you are confused Unnecessary verb
apply
whether
to go for Change preposition
about whether
post-gradutaion
or start looking for work. I would suggest Correct your spelling
post-graduation
you
that it is better to start a job in your field as Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
would add to your resume. You have completed your bachelors
in Interior Design and have already done a Change noun form
bachelor's
six month
long internship with an Architect and you have thoroughly enjoyed Add a hyphen
six-month
while
working. Correct word choice
apply
Therefore
, I do not think you will
now like to go back to classes and study after getting hands-on experience in the field.
Wrong verb form
would
Moreover
, you are not thinking to become
a professor for which there might have been Change preposition
of becoming
requirement
of higher education. Add an article
a requirement
the requirement
Therefore
, now start looking for job
and look for roles like junior Interior Designer or you can even go for Furniture Designer's role as you have Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
interest
in furniture making Interior Correct article usage
an interest
Stylist
in brands like West Elm Fix the agreement mistake
stylists
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
also
a good option.
I hope my advice will help you to take
a decision soon. Let me know about it in your next letter.
Give my regards to Uncle and Aunty.
Love
BindiyaCorrect your spelling
make
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grammar and mechanics
Consider varying your sentence structures to enhance readability, and review for occasional grammatical errors such as 'post-gradutaion' which should be 'post-graduation'.
coherence
Though there is a clear logical structure, try to ensure smoother transitions between points.
task achievement
You've provided a thorough response addressing all parts of the task prompt.
tone
The tone is appropriately friendly and supportive, suitable for writing to a friend.
paragraphing
The paragraphs each focus on a single idea, which contributes to clarity.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite