The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015.
The bar chart gives information about the percentage of divorces in
Finland
and Sweden
between 2011 and 2015.
Overall
, Sweden
experienced a downward trend, while
Finland
showed an upward trend throughout the period. Both
countries, divorce rates had some fluctuations. Change preposition
In both
Although
Finland
initially
had most
mediocre amount, it outraged Correct article usage
the most
Sweden
at the end
of the period.
Sweden
's detachment rate was about 45% in 2011, being
higher than Unnecessary verb
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Finland
's rate by approximately 81%. Then
, it rose by almost fifty percent
in 2012. Change the spelling
per cent
However
, the figure showed a gradual dive to about 47% in 2014,
and continued to decline steadily to the end of the period, reaching around 45% in 2015 and hitting the nadir of about 37% in 2015.
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apply
Percentage
of breakups in Correct article usage
The percentage
Finland
were
less than 40% in 2011, and it decreased in 2012Correct subject-verb agreement
was
,
when about Remove the comma
apply
one
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one-third
third
of marriages in Finland
ended with a divorce at almost a
half in Correct article usage
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Sweden
. However
, the figure experienced steady growth during the next
two years. It rose approximately 39% in 2013, then
surged by around 3% in 2014, and remained constant for the next
year, attracting the rate of Sweden
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