some people believe that university students should work part time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, working part-
time
jobs while studying has become a necessity for many students.
Although
, some people argued that a part-
time
job may harm studies. In
this
essay, I would like to discuss the pros and cons to students taking up part-
time
jobs during their studying. The goo
d advant
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The best
age is about working part-
time
during high school, college and university are not only earn extra pocket money to pay daily expense
but
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expense, but
also
it is a crucial opportunity which you can have hand-on
exp
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hands
erience and gain working
skills
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work
day by day that to assist students for the real working world.
Besides
, students will be excel at multitasking as the found the
time
to work and study simultaneously.
For instance
, if students who are interna
tional and job seeker , they
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international and job seekers
the international and job seeker
w
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,
ill be given some experic
ene at wor
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experience
king environment
such
as culture,lifest
y
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,
le, language and so on from foreign
country
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foreign countries
a foreign country
Moreover
, a part-
time
job is rewarding to help students be responsible for their schedules, finance, and duties. Every work environment brings students to meet new people. That's why students who can gain independence, even getting more high powered in their career. One of the ineffective sides, working part-
time
while studying is certainly lack of
time
. Students indeed
reject school
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have indeed rejected
activities and their colleagues because there is no
time
to have fun so
studen
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fun, so
ts will be dead-tired to put offload on their shoulders. It's even students are down and out in terms of exams and ruin their career prospects. Additio
naly, one m
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Additionally
ore negative thing is that students only see having wages without degrees is the best way more than focus on studying.
Although
, a variety
of peo
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variation
ple's example
who are su
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example, who
ccess
enterp
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successful
rise. It's better in case of special
ty.
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Specialty
After a discussion of both sides. It can be concluded that students need to be confident in your
time
management and organized skills to ensure their education. It will
also
depend on individual responsibility for working part-
time
while studying.
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