Some people feel the it always wrong to keep animals in captivity, for instance, in zoos. Other people say that there are benefits for he animals and for humans. Discuss both sides of this debate and give your opinion.

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It is debatable issue that should people preserve animals away from their natural

habidats

the type of environment in which an organism or group normally lives or occurs

habitats

or not interfere the

nature

Use synonyms

at all. While some people argue the process of keeping animals in special zones built by humans in order to protect them,

refers to the speaker or writer

tend to agree with others who

ackowledge

declare to be true or admit the existence or reality or truth of

acknowledge

the necessity of taking care of animals, even by reducing their freedom.

To begin

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with positives, it is

quiet

to a degree (not used with a negative)

quite

obvious that some

involments

a person who supplies information

informants

made by people to the environment might have a detrimental effect on the whole ecosystem.

In other words

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, if scientist

Suggestion

, if a scientist

start

Suggestion

starts

to isolate some

indangered

(of flora or fauna) in imminent danger of extinction

endangered

species in order to protect them, they will may interrupt environmental circulation.

As a result

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, the

nature

Use synonyms

will probably lose its balance and some severe diseases can spread all over the world. For

instanse

an occurrence of something

instance

instances

, a couple of

centures

a period of 100 years

centuries

ago one of

european

of or relating to or characteristic of Europe or the people of Europe

European

country decided to eliminate the amount of cats in the city's streets, and

this

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trend lead to appearing severe diseases among people through increased

level

Suggestion

levels

of rats, as

cats

Suggestion

the cats

were

natural barier

Suggestion

a natural barrier

natural barrier

natural barriers

in balancing the quantity of rats, so without them there was no obstacle in front of the rats.

However

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, the less people do in

favor

promote over another

favour

of protecting animals that can be extinct in

near future

Suggestion

the near future

, the more are chances that many species will die out. Many governments

has begin

Suggestion

have begun

to use animals as a source of gaining revenue,

such

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as demonstrating them in zoos for

fixed fee

Suggestion

a fixed fee

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Moreover by

Accept comma addition

Moreover, by

creating a place similar to

natural habidats

Suggestion

the natural habitats

natural habitats

of animals, the authorities tend to smooth the isolating process and

make

engage in

less harm to the

nature

Use synonyms

, as animals will still run and smell fresh air but in special zones which is safe for them.

For example

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, there are a lot of natural parks where live a vast variety of endangered species away from the risk of starving and

desiases

an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning

disease

, and in an emergency cases vets will able to give

first

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aid to animals, as they will be located much closer to people. In conclusion,

although

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isolating animals from their natural places of living may bring some serious natural catastrophes as the consequence of interfering the

nature

Use synonyms

's balancing process, it will be

quiet

to a degree (not used with a negative)

quite

beneficial for

government

Suggestion

the government

to use them as a source of income and for animals

also

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, because these places will be well-equipped with vets and away from food providing problem.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

389 words

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Some people feel the it always wrong to keep animals in captivity, for instance, in zoos. Other people say that there are benefits for he animals and for humans. Discuss both sides of this debate and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

What are the pros and cons of using public transport?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?