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Some people believe that the radio is more enjoyable and practical than TV. Do you agree?

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With the development of media, especially
TV
 media, some people prefer
TV
 to radio. To some extent, I don’t agree with the idea, even though sometimes
TV
 is more enjoyable. I have to admit that
TV
 can provide a visual impact on people, meanwhile it
also
 offers audio enjoyment as radios.
Furthermore
,
TV
 has combined with some advancing technologies
such
 as AI and 3D which fill more demands of audiences. But it is the visual experience which the pictures and animations on
TV
 give us that ruins all our imaginations. For
this
 reason, most of the
TV
 series adapted from novels r
eceive
Suggestion
receives
negative comments. That’s because readers have produced the whole story in their brains, in a
nother
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
w
ords they
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words, they
have set images for all the characters and scenarios.
As a result
, when they see the same scene on
TV
, it is hard to match their imagination with the picture on
TV
. Even though acoustic devices cannot meet l
isteners
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listeners'
needs in v
ision,
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a vision
 while these sounds conveyed by them inspire audiences to think about related events in their own lives.
Hence
, people get more space to imagine.
Besides
, compared with
TV
 programs, radio channels i
s
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are
more available and accessible for most of us. It’s easy to illustrate, you only need to think about the situation on your way home. I believe commuters like you are more likely to turn on your radio or music app on your phone than video apps. All in all, the two mediums both have their own advantages.
However
, personally radios are more enjoyable and practical than
TV
 in most of t
ime.
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the time
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