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People are spend a lot of money on various things as they earn more money as before. Is it a positive or negative development?

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Due to the better financial status comparative to
bygone era
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a bygone era
, these days,
majority
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the majority
 of people are being spent too much money on different equipments. It is a debatable issue that whether it is a positive or negative development?
This
 essay will highlight both developments
.
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.
 To embark on,
first
 of all
,
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,
 it
enhance
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enhances
 the
countries
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country's
economy which
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economy, which
 is a positive sign for
nations
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the nations
. If the financial status is good among the people think it help to reduce the crime and there is less theft cases conducted by individuals because they have a disposable income, so they can be fulfilled their needs as well as the needs of their loved ones.
Moreover
, it will be
declined poverty
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declined, poverty
 rate among citizens because many things in
market
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the market
 are affordable for them.
Consequently
, it has many positive impacts on
country
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the country
.
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.
 Moving towards to its demerits,
firstly they
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firstly, they
 tend to lose the value of things and money as well
,
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,
 due to some reasons like
,
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,
 they waste their huge hard earned cash on
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 unnecessary appliances
such
 as mobile phones, laptops, clothes, shoes and so on. Certainly,
this
 is thoroughly the wastage of money and can be became a large concern for
country
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the country
. Because after some time masses throw away their own things which are being surged garbage in most regions.
Additionally
, it moves the nation to
undevelopment
. To conclude,
although
 it has some disadvantages yet it deem that it's positive influence are far more than
negative
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negated
. Whereas
,
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,
 people should be
spent
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spending
 their amount in
limit
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the limit
 along with required things.

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