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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
It is considered by a few people that these days a huge number of options surround us. I partially agree with
this
 statement, no doubt there are numerous options, an individual can avail in today's world of progress, but I think resources for a
person
also
 play a prestigious role in helping someone to select an option. In
this
 modern era of time, the world has progressed a lot that any individual has various options to select if that individual has some know-how and experience in the related
field
. These ways are not restricted to any particular
field
,
although
 every
field
 has its own scope and way anyone can adopt.
For instance
, people related to the business
field
 could make progress by adapting different ways if they are well-experienced.
Similarly
, students at their career selection stage
also
 have many choices in selecting the category of their education.
Besides
 having many tacks for
peoplel
, resources
also
 help a lot in selecting that route or track. These resources may include the resource of time, the resource of money, the resource of health and many more. Considering the example that a student has a passion to become a doctor, but his/her parents are not able to handle the expenses of private university or a man is keen to start a business, but he does not have good health and any good workers to help him in that business so these factors hinder the way towards selecting the choices. It can be concluded that life gives many paths to a
person
, but it depends on a
person
 to avail or selects a competitive way out of many to have success in his life. A
person
 has to identify the path based on available resources and need of the time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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