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Many People believe that having a fixed punishment for all crimes in efficient. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a fixed punishment.

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Most people opine that giving identical punishments to all criminals is a well-organized way.
This
 essay will explore the benefits and will
also
 discuss
harm
Suggestion
the harm
 of having a
stable
meant or adapted for an occasion or use
suitable
 penalty for all culprits.
To begin
 with, the primary merit of giving same punishments to all
law-breakers
someone who violates the law
lawbreakers
lawbreakers'
lawbreaker's
 is that there will be
maximum decline
Suggestion
a maximum decline
 in all crimes provided that the penalty is severe as the perpetrators will think twice before committing a
crime
. The secondary boon of executing
such
 punishments will annihilate the evil in our society.
For instance
, a survey report submitted by
criminal law
Suggestion
the criminal law
 of justice states that there was nearly 10-15% drop in
crime
 in countries where they adopted
this
 method.
On the other hand
, the main demerit of having fixed punishments for all captives is it will be
complete injustice
Suggestion
a complete injustice
 to some of them as there will be some criminals whose
crime
 would not be major as others captives. The other negative of having similar punishments will not wipe off the enemy of the
society but
Accept comma addition
society, but
 it will
further
 create more criminals.
For example
, a report submitted by the justice court indicated that there was nearly
increase
Suggestion
increased
 in double of crimes after executing the jailers with identical punishments. To conclude, different punishments should be given to inmates according to the severity of the
crime
 committed by the convict.
This
 essay discussed the pros and cons of giving alike punishments to culprits and
also
 discussed why giving unchanged punishments to these prisoners has its own advantages but why having inconsistent punishment for all inmates is ultimately superior.

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