More Children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience.

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most of the children in healthy nations are becoming overweight.

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is a major problem for wealthy countries due to some reasons.

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the effects

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obstacle before coming to a reasoned conclusion. To commence with

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there are some aspects available due to

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problem.

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of all

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children's do not like to eat their own homemade

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food but

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food, but

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they like to eat oily and fatty

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means youngsters give most importance to

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restaurants, food

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and oily

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leads to overweight.

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people like to eat healthy

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nutrition, food

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having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease

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contains most unconscious things not conscious.

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way it causes most problems in children's life.

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they become healthy and fatty in healthy countries.To illustrate in India

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some healthy and unconscious

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available in different restaurants at different destinations.Due to available these unconscious

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obstacles

in healthy nations.

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there are some effects available due to

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serious problem.Mostly

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because they eat oily as well as healthy

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of their own homemade

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it causes many

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problems

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due to unconscious

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like obesity

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in healthy nations.

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it is

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in different manner it means

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a young person of either sex

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eat healthy

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as burgers

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sandwiches

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way individuals become overweight and obese people. To conclude

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people as well as

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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263 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

obesity
sedentary
caloric intake
processed foods
fast food culture
screen time
metabolic disorders
healthcare expenditure
lifestyle diseases
preventative strategies
nutritional education
public health policy
body mass index (BMI)
emotional well-being
stigmatization
exercise regimen
eating habits
junk food
socioeconomic factors
health literacy

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More Children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Many criminals commit more crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday.write a letter to your friend

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