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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter ● say why he/she would not enjoy going to college ● explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her ● suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

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Dear Jasur, I was happy to get your letter about your plans. It's a big decision to choose between college and working. It's
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great that you are thinking about your future. I think getting a job is better for you than going to college. College has a lot of studying and exams I know you don't like it. You enjoy doing things and being active more than sitting in a classroom. Getting
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 is a good idea because you can earn money and become more independent. It's a good way to start your career. Working
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 helps you develop skills that will be
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 throughout your life. You can work in sales because you are good with people. And you have the ability to fix things with your hands, jobs like a mechanic,
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 or carpenter could be suitable for you. I hope
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, I will always support you
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 friend. Yours sincerely, Umirov Fayozbek
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task achievement
Try to eliminate minor grammatical errors for a more polished letter. For instance, 'It's a great that' should be 'It's great that.'
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a single clear idea and develop it fully. This will enhance the logical flow of the letter.
suitable writing tone
The letter is friendly and supportive, which is ideal for an informal letter to a friend.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriate and add a personal touch.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Real-world experience
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • On-the-job training
  • Student loan debt
  • Personal growth
  • Professional networking
  • Career development
  • Skilled workers
  • Job market
  • Career goals
  • Immediate income
  • Professional relationships
  • Market demand
  • Defining interests
  • Educational investments
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