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The bar chart provided information about the divorce rates in Finland and Sweden in
years
Suggestion
the years
 2011 to 2015. Overall, at the beginning of the period Finland represent lower
percentage
 and showed some fluctuate at the middle
years
Accept comma addition
years, however
however
, it
become
Suggestion
becomes
 higher in
percentage
 in final year.
in
Suggestion
In
 comparison with Sweden started
increasement
 but there was some
fluctuate
Suggestion
fluctuation
 and fail in
last year
Suggestion
the last year
.
in
Suggestion
In
 Finland started around 35% in 2011 and there was
decreasment
the amount by which something decreases
decrement
 in 2012 by four
percentage
in addition
, it showed
increasment
 in 2013 and 2014 approximately (39% and 41%) and it is made up stable
through out
all the way through
throughout
 the final year 2015. On
other hand
Suggestion
the other hand
,
Accept space
,
 Sweden on the starting of
period
Suggestion
the period
 made up the highest
percentage
 around 45% in 2011 and it
is rose
Suggestion
has risen
rises
 to approximately 49% in 2012 but, there was
deacresment
the amount by which something decreases
decrement
 on the
last
 three years in 2013
deacresed
made less in size or amount or degree
decreased
 by 3% and it
get
Suggestion
gets
downword
extending or moving from a higher to a lower place
downward
down word
downwards
 by 2% in 2014
mo
the natural satellite of the Earth
moon
 rover, in 2015 it is showed the lowest
percentage
 around 37%.
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