one of the consequences of the medical care is that people are living longer and expentensy is increasing Do you think this advantage of development overwieghts the disadvantage?

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together in a delegate balance. Modern medical facilities and research in the healthcare sector have brought miracles to the world. The main significance of advancements in technology, with respect to health,
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created a positive improvement across the world
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people get
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and recover earlier when they suffer from any ailment which results
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the cons. From my point of view, as time flies there are several scientific breakthroughs in the field of
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which are widespread and they enhance on
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the rise of lifespan.
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it is increasing the chances to live a longer
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been an abrupt change in the advancements of medicines field.
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nutrient levels, even though we
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to perform any unembellished surgery which
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of patients. From my perspective,
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serious consequences in the world, as natural
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anticipation is increasing which
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the shortage of basic needs for people like food, shelter and clothes. To illustrate,
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daily basis and for controlling the circle of
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appropriate policies should
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by the state to implement them.
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which
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we now live longer and
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part of the progress.
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expectancy is a blessing for the human race

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • public health
  • medical technology
  • vaccinations
  • antibiotics
  • senior health care
  • geriatric services
  • overpopulation
  • natural resources
  • environmental strain
  • dependency ratio
  • working-age population
  • retirees
  • contribute to society
  • personal goals
  • medical industry
  • economic growth
  • age-related diseases
  • health care costs
  • health care system
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