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Most people accept that we now live in a globalized world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial. To what extent is globalization a positive or negative development? Write at least 250 words.

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Living in the globalized
world
 is thought beneficial to a few
people where as
Accept comma addition
people, whereas
people whereas
 others consider it of no use. In my opinion,
globalization
 has more benefits over a few disadvantages that can be corrected by taking appropriate actions.
This
 essay will
further
 discuss, how the advantages of
globalization
 outweigh the disadvantage. On the one hand,
globalization
 promotes interaction and integration between countries for trades, political and social welfare.
This
 will increase job opportunities and improve economic and social development.
However
, due to the unity, there might be a chance of losing our own identity and culture.
This
 can be improved by making sure the value of our own tradition and culture
are retained
Suggestion
is retained
.
On the other hand
,
globalization
 offers no boundaries so that more
oppurtunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
opportunity
 to develop poor areas of the
world
. Since access to resources become
more easier
Suggestion
easier
 and faster, individuals experience greater prosperity with easier access to what they need.
On the contrary
, it generally makes the rich become rich and the poor to become trapped in poverty.
This
 could
also
 be resolved by monitoring the flow of resources are helping people in need. To sum up, globalisation is beneficial by increased employments, improved economic development, social development and aiming to improve poor areas of the
world
.
However
, like all the
beneficts
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
 comes with a few cons
such
 as
loss
Suggestion
the loss
 of our own identity and rich becoming richer. The
globalization
 pros and cons show that there would be many benefits to a
borderless
world
, but there would
also
 be great challenges that would need to be solved for it to be a workable solution.

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