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Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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The education is
one
 of the important aspects in the
world
. Some people think that teaching the
literature
 of own
country
 is crucial to the children.
However
,
other
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others
 think it's not that important for Children. I support for the
first
 statement that learning own
country
literature
 is very important. On the
one
 hand, there are so many languages exists in the
world
 to communicate people. Some languages
represents
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represent
 their
culture
.
Moreover
,
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,
It's our responsibility to remember the
culture
 and make their presence exists.
For instance
, in
one
 of the
state the
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state, the
 government declared Hindi
language
 as their
first
language
 and the people in the state declared a strike to not to implement that and they want their local
language
 as their
first
language
.
On the other hand
,
one
language
,
one
world
 is the concept of the present society. Most part of the
world
 communicates in English
language
. If you know English
language you
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language, you
 can survive in any part of the eastern countries.
Consequently
,
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,
learning English
language
 provides more opportunities to settle anywhere in the
country
. In case if you don't find a job that matched your profile
then
 you search in other
country
. Even you can explore the
world
 and see different
culture
 and taste different foods. To conclude, there are so many advantages to learn other
literature but
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literature, but
one
 should not forget the roots and avoid learning own
literature
. Where ever you go we would carry our
culture
 and respect our own
literature
. Even, we should be in a position to teach the
literature
 to our children.
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