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in many modern socities grandchildren spend any quality time with their grandparents . what do you are the consequence of this.

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nowadays
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Nowadays
, most of the masses live far from their
grand parents
a parent of your father or mother
grandparents
 due to some reasons.
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however
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However
,
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,
 when children spend their quality
time
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 with their grandparents it play
very vital role
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a very vital role
for
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in
development
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the development
 of children.
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therefore
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Therefore
, in
this
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 essay
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 shall enunciate some benefits which
chlidren
a young person of either sex
children
 get from their grandparents in subsequent
paragraphns
one of several distinct subdivisions of a text intended to separate ideas; the beginning is usually marked by a new indented line
paragraphs
.
To begin
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 with, there are a plethora of benefits children obtain from their
grandparents but
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grandparents, but
predominat one
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the predominant one
predominant one
predominate one
 coming to my mind is that, when children spend their superior
time
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 with their
grandparents they
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grandparents, they
 get lots of knowledge about the ethical and moral values which play an indispensable role
for
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in
 the development of
any
quantifier; used with either mass nouns or plural count nouns to indicate an unspecified number or quantity
some
 children.
Moreover
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,
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,
 they
also
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 acquire
informtion
a message received and understood
information
 from grandparent how to communicate with senior masses of the community
.
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.
Further
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 reinforcing my perspective, children get knowledge about how to build superior
reltionship
a relation between people; ('relationship' is often used where 'relation' would serve, as in 'the relationship between inflation and unemployment', but the preferred usage of 'relationship' is for human relations or states of relatedness)
relationship
relationships
 with their family member as well as the people of
community
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the community
a community
. At present,
grandparent
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the grandparent
 has more free
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time so
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time, so
 they take care their grandchildren in very well manner. As an example
,
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,
nowdays
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
 mostly both parents do work.
Therefore
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,
some
at some indefinite or unstated time
sometime
time
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 they fell arduous about their children

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