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most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money.

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In today's world, there are lots of people who cannot afford a
house
 for themselves. Some people believe that these people could be benefited only by supporting economically.
This
 essay will discuss why I completely disagree with
this
 proposition because there are alternatives to support these people,
such
 as education, meals, employment, and etc. To embark on,
firstly
, the main objective of communities is to provide residence to people who are not capable enough to live in their own
house
 and stay in slum areas. Just providing them fund might not suffice the purpose of giving them a shelter to live as it is not necessary that these individuals are going to utilise the offered amount for constructing a home,
instead
 there is a possibility of misusing that
money
.
For instance
, some people in my country usually do not use the
money
 in an appropriate way, especially it is offered as a help.
Hence
, rather than helping economically, one can get free education and meals as a support.
Moreover
, the reason why only
money
 would not be beneficial for poor people, especially, who do not have their own
house
 is that, they barely would understand the value of earning until they do it themselves.
For instance
,
money
 offered for one time would be limited one.
However
, employment will offer funding for the long run.
Hence
, providing employment
instead
 of
money
 would give them a better chance to arrange a
house
. To recapitulate,
this
 essay discussed why only
money
 would no be a great help for citizens without home because
this
money
 offered might be misused by people and it will be a static for just a certain time period.In my opinion, I completely disagree with the proposition that economic help alone would not be useful for people who does not have a home
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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