Some think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is to pay them based on how much they produce and sell. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
As businesses become more competitive, almost every manager is now trying to motivate their employees to put more effort into their job
performance
, and a common way of doing so is basing an employee’s salary on their rate of production
and sales
. I, however
, do not agree that this
would be the most effective method. The performance
of many workers
cannot simply be quantified in terms of sales
or production
. For example
, my job as a teacher is to teach classes, assess homework, and provide my students with feedback, none of which involves producing or selling any product with a definite price tag. This
renders measuring how much I have ‘sold’ or ‘produced’ very difficult or even impossible for the language school where I work. Instead
, it is the performance
of my students and their level of satisfaction with aspects of my performance
such
as rapport or punctuality that decide how successful I have been. Furthermore
, the performance
of many workers
is greatly affected by external factors beyond their control. The current state of the economy, unexpected political developments, and extreme weather conditions can all have significant impacts on how much a worker can sell or produce. A hurricane, for example
, can easily devastate a farm and all its produce without its workers
being responsible for any of the damages or the ensuing drop in production
rates. Therefore
, basing wages on sales
or production
rates would actually demotivate workers
in such
cases. In conclusion, I think deciding how much an employee should earn based solely on their sales
or production
figures would be both impossible and unfair in most,
if not all, cases. Remove the comma
apply
Instead
, employers should look at a more diverse set of performance
indicators, including customer satisfaction and punctuality.Submitted by rha8892 on
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