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Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health. Others believe that the Government should make sure that their citizens are healthy. Discuss both views.

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The line graph illustrates changes in the levels of coffee exports in three South American countries from 2002 to 2012 and is measured in millions of kilograms. Overall, it can be seen that, despite some fluctuations, over the period as a whole the levels of exports rose in all three countries. Brazil and Costa Rica produced the most coffee. They began at a fairly similar level of between 12 and 15
million
 kilograms in 2002, but while the coffee exported from Brazil increased gradually over the following four years, exports from Costa Rica experienced a significant fall to around 7.5
million
.
However
, they both
then
 followed a similar trend, increasing steadily to 20
million
 (Costa Rica) and 25
million
 (Brazil). Colombia had a more erratic
pattem
a perceptual structure
pattern
 of exports than the other two countries. Exports stood at 5
million
 kilograms per year in 2002, which was lower than Costa Rica or Brazil. They overtook Costa Rica in 2006, with exports reaching 12
million
, but there was
then
 a sharp fall to 2008, when exports hit a low of 2.5
million
. Following
this
, exports increased rapidly to finish the period at 15
million
.

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