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Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns leaving only old people in the countrysides. What problem does this cause? What can be done to solve the problem

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In
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 competitive world, young adults move to cities to look for better
job
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 scope and
employment leaving
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employment, leaving
 their old folks in the countryside.
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 essay will discuss the problem caused by
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 migration and provide a solution. There are many large organizations and companies who have their business in the city. Young people have no choice but to leave the rural area and move to urban cities to seek for
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 opportunities and better standard of living.
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 has created. Gap between the old and the young generation. There is no one to look after the old folks and
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 is causing them health issues. A recent survey showed that there is a significant increase in the depression level amongst
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older
 people due to loneliness. One way to curb
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 problem is to move some companies and large organizations
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 rural areas where people can find
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 opportunities as well. Government should
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 take the initiative to upgrade the infrastructure in the rural area to provide the same facility as there is in the city. By taking these steps people will not need to leave their old folks behind at the countrysides. In conclusion,
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 believe that if the necessary steps are taken by the government to Provide
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 opportunities and upgraded infrastructures the problem of Young people leaving moving to urban areas could be solved.

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