Some parents and teachers think that children’s behavior should be strictly controlled. While some think that children should be free to behave. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is argued whether parents and teachers should enforce strict
control
on children’s
behaviour
or just let them behave freely. In my opinion, neither total freedom nor absolute
control
will benefit children; rather parents should monitor their conduct properly. On the one hand, too much
control
on children’s
behaviour
can affect the formation and development of some valuable abilities. Primarily, it will hurt the problem solving skill of children as
this
ability is cultivated and developed through trial and error. If parents and teachers put too much
control
on children, they will have no solutions for the problems they might face in future. It is more likely for them to consult their teachers and parents for suitable and effective solutions, which is the undesirable result of over dependence on others.
Besides
, children whose behaviours are highly controlled by parents and teachers may be restricted in imagination and creativity, which are essential to their academic performance and
also
the key to gain success in complicated tasks in the workplace in the future.
However
, it is not to say that children’s
behaviour
should not be monitored / supervised at all. Having no
control
on children’s
behaviour
can lead to detrimental results. My primary concern is that children may fail to respect and obey laws and regulations and they may simply behave in the way they like.
For example
, children may misbehave by engaging in activities
such
as habitual lying or littering just to entertain themselves without realizing that they have already violated some regulations.
On the contrary
, if the parents and teachers discipline their children whenever they go wrong, they are more likely to become law-abiding adults or even contributing members of their community. In conclusion, I believe that both parents and teachers have an obligation to discipline, children’s behaviours and educate them in proper ways, rather than enforcing strict
control
or permitting absolute freedom.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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