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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Allocating funds to develop railways and roads is debatable. Some people claim that the government must allocate money on railways rather than roads. I agree with
this
 statement because
journey
 in a
train
 is more comfortable than bus and it is economical when compared to travelling in buses or cars.
Firstly
, passengers prefers travelling on a
train
 because it is comfortable. Many of those with motion sickness feel quite normal in a
train
journey
.
Further
, people consider trains both for short and long distance.
For example
, metros within the city are faster than buses or cars. People can actually have sound sleep without any disturbances while they have a long
journey
 in a
train
. According to the recent survey, 73% of the population in the UK consider trains rather than road
journey
 because of convenience and comfortability.
Moreover
, government gets good revenue from railways, since a greater number of people can be accommodated in a
train
.
Secondly
, it is economical to go on a
train
 to distant places, especially with family. The cost will be minimal when bulk bookings are made.
In addition
, daily or monthly passes are available, for those who need to go to work in a different place, which is far away from their home.
Moreover
, it is a one time expenditure for government because maintenance is relatively less for rails.
For example
, a study at Harvard university revealed there were more road accidents than
train
 accidents and
therefore
 trains are safe and reasonable. In conclusion, the ministry must invest on trains rather than buses because people find it comfortable and reasonable.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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