Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The childhood place a crucial role, in the process of sculpting a great man for the
future
. The teaching and conditions from which a
child
goes through, eventually affects his mind and behaviour. If a young growing
childern
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child
children
is left up to make his choices and decisions in everyday matters, the
first
possibility would be that, he or she would make mistakes in making
such
decision and eventually regret it later and possibly learn from it.
Supposely
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Supposedly
, if
child
choose to watch
a
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an
animated general content
movie
instead
of
scientific content
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the scientific content movie, which
the scientific content movie which
movie
which was suggested to him by his class teacher. Later, when the other children in his classrooms have
discussion
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a discussion
discussions
about the things they learnt in the
movie
, the
child
would regret his decision and would definitely choose
informative
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an informative movie
movie
in the
future
.
On the other hand
, if the children is constantly
bragged
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bragging
and forced to do things which he dislikes, would eventually make him stubborn and arrogant. It is
also
likely, that the
child
may end up in a trauma or
dillema
state of uncertainty or perplexity especially as requiring a choice between equally unfavorable options
dilemma
diploma
in
future
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the future
. I
also
believe that the decisions the children make are properly guided and supported by their parents could wash out the worry of having a self centric
individuals
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individual
in the
future
.
Recapitualating
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Recapitulating
, my opinion is
strongly
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strong
to biased, that the children should be given all the freedom to make their decision in the guidance of their mentor and parent.
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