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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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In my view, people in a
country
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 should know and see their cultural and tourist attractions. It helps people try to be responsible for the treasures of their
country
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 and attempt to persevere them. I think people in a
country
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 don't have to make a payment like tourists do, because the government costs in infrastructures and amenities to absorb tourists and foreigner should pay for these charges.
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, tourist pay for tickets five times more than natives in Isfahan. In the other hand, people in a
country
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 must take advantages from their tourism attractions.
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, native people can sell their products and handmade to travellers, they can hold festivals to represent their native foods, events and traditions.
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, I think tourism attractions in each
country
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 have a great potential to make a profit and both the government and folks can take advantage.
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