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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Face to face communication is better than the other types of communication,such as letters,e-mail, or telephone calls. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

#face #communication #letters #e-mail #telephone #support
Dear Supplier, Greetings! I’m writing to you in order to introduce
to
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you to
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 an
auction
, which expects to raise funds
towards to
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for
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 a charity cause.
This
 would be part of an event that we are planning to conduct
in
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apply
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this
 summer. The event would be a
full day
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 programme, which includes magic shows, comedy shows and
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a small
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small scale
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 amusement park.
Additionally
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,Additionally
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 we have considered
to have
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having
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the
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an
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auction
.
Further
, we have planned to display a separate stand for raising awareness of the importance of education and how it is essential for
the
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students from developing countries. We are expecting to donate books for Sri Lankan students from identified
low earning
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low-earning
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 families. We are hoping to conduct an
auction
 in view of selling the unwanted papers in our offices. Proceeds from the
auction
 would be directly put aside
towards
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for
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 purchasing the
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textbooks
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text books
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textbooks
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. I would appreciate it
,
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 if you could participate
on
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in
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this
 noble cause by contributing the unwanted papers from your company. It is environmentally friendly and it would reduce your office space for document
storing
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. I wish to see you your valuable participation and contribution
of
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to
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 making
this
 event
success
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successful
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. Looking forward to
hear
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hearing
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 soon. Regards,

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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