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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue?

#world #measures #governments #individuals
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Human role in catastrophic changes in natural corruption of our world has
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reached
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 level since the beginning of the Industrial Age. Most people think that those changes in
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nature are becoming the most severe problems for humankind.
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global warming and provide some potential
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 to minimize those effects on it. Many people and experts think the
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most topical
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 in the causes of
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global warming is
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 use of fossil fuels. The majority of the amount of energy production from fossil fuels has accounted
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 in most
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 over the world. The result of overuse
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pollution in
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 by emitting large amounts of CO2, which in turn leads to
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 in average air temperature which is called
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Global Warming.
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 major reason is deforestation. Nowadays, governments are exterminating trees, forests,
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 to use lands for building highways,
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 dams.
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 causes
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 in atmospheric balance,
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 as corruption in
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 cycle which has
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 on
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 process and on
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 of farmlands. The most important measure is to increase
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the amount of energy generated from renewable sources,
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 as wind, solar power, and waste power. These
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 of sources provide
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 energy production process without any chemical contamination in land and air.
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, governments should educate people about potential disasters of
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Global Warming and make them aware of
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 problem. In conclusion, global warming is an issue which will continue to demand our attention for the foreseeable future. Governments and individuals must face
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 issue with a realistic and solution-seeking perspective and steps should be taken on a war footing to protect our home.
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks clear paragraphing and the introduction should set the context of the problem more effectively. Use clear topic sentences at the beginning of paragraphs.
task achievement
Expand on the ideas presented by providing more specific examples and explanations to support the main points and ensure a complete response to the prompt.
lexical resource
The lexical resource is adequate but could be improved with a wider range of vocabulary and more precise language use. Avoid repetitions and aim to demonstrate a higher range of vocabulary.
grammatical range
Work on varying grammatical structures. The presence of errors slightly obstructs meaning. Aim to use complex sentences effectively and accurately.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global issue
  • severity
  • urgency
  • greenhouse effect
  • human-induced
  • deforestation
  • fossil fuel combustion
  • industrial pollution
  • environmental regulations
  • emission standards
  • renewable energy sources
  • green technologies
  • international cooperation
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • energy consumption
  • public transportation
  • recycling
  • eco-friendly
  • extreme weather conditions
  • biodiversity
  • economic stability
  • collective responsibility
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