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Some people say that international sporting events contribute greatly to peace and stability in the world.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In ancient times, sports used to be considered a juvenile activity which was only confined to parks and indoors. While today sports have pushed the boundaries and have attracted national and international audiences and players. So, there is no denying that sports have the power to unite the
world
 and maintain global
peace
 and I completely agree with
this
 viewpoint. Undoubtedly, sports at international level play a sterling role in diplomatic relations among different nations. Owing to historical or political reasons, not all the countries are at
peace
 with each other. Admittedly, sports evoke the similar pleasure and satisfaction as a victory in war does but brings nations together.
Moreover
, global sports events can be an icebreaker as competitors from nations to create a common platform for global leaders, organizations, and athletes to interact in more convenient and sophisticated way. A good illustration is the Olympic games in which the whole
world
 can be brought together and
this
 has a positive impact on maintaining global harmony.
Furthermore
, sports evokes high nationalistic passions towards the country along with providing a platform for patriotic emotions to be released. It is a constructive way to exhibit one's patriotic emotions. Even, International game events
such
 as Commonwealth games bring recognition to small countries.
For instance
, it is difficult to locate West Indies and Bermuda on the
world
 map,
however
, they are well-known countries just because of their cricket teams which always participate in Cricket
World
 Cup. By and large, the sport is the only activity which delivers a clear message of
peace
 and paves the road to building
world
 harmony. To reiterate, sports activity is a positive channelling of energy which kills negativity and brings
peace
 and joy to the
world
.
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