Some people believe that the museums and historic sites should be open for free for children under 18. Do you agree or disagree?

The graphs
illustrates
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illustrate
the proportion of citizen, the figures and percentages how many elder citizens in Japan since 1950 to 2055. Overall, the bar graph shows the increasing trend until 2005, at that point the number will have been decreasing until 2055.
Also
in
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at
on
the table, change of elder citizens
are showing
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is showing
similar trend
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similar trends
a similar trend
. In the bar graph, the number of
population
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the population
is equally gradually growing up 1950-1990. Since 1990, it was levelled off around 124 million during
25 years
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the 25 years
1990 to 2015. In the predicted year 2035 and 2055, the figure will drop until 110 and 89.9 respectively.
On the other hand
, in the table, in 1950, proportion of aged 65 years or over have been increasing until 2035,
however in
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however, in
the predicted year of 2055, the figure will decline only 0.7 million people. But the percentage of old people is increasing until even 2055. In 2005
,
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,
the percentage represented four times increase than 1950.

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