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Nowadays more and more business meetings and trainings are taking place online. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Today, development of technology is much faster than any
time
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 before.
This
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 advancement has encompassed both the personal and professional aspects of human’s life, which
business
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 is not the exception. Online
business
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 meeting and training
is
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are
have been
 one of these advancements happened in
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world
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 recently.
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 as every other new phenomenon, it has its own edges as well as drawbacks.
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, I do believe that the advantages are more noticeable than the disadvantages of the subject which I discuss it in the following.
First
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 and foremost, online
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 meetings and training break the limits of
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 and distance all around the
world
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.
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, a businessman who
live
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lives
 in China cloud easily invest in
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 projects in the US or
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 as much distance as possible parts of the
world
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, with no regard to
time
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 differences or remoteness. Individuals are able to easily take part in their
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 related meetings and sort out their responsibilities. In
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
am
 the same way, online
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 training is
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makeing
the act that results in something coming to be
making
 it possible for every individual to enrol in different
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 training workshops and courses without leaving even their own house. Fortunately,
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 development
give
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gives
 individual in every
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city
 or countries an equal opportunity to attend
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 courses. The other advantages of online performances in
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business
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the business world
world
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is enhancing
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are enhancing
 the quality of
economy
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the economy
. Easily reachable training courses train powerful businessmen all around the
world
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 who are connected with each other. Online meetings facilitate their contributions in different
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 plans
worldwide which
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worldwide, which
 helps to enrich the economic issues. Inevitably, burgeoning technology had its own problems and dangers as well. Online
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 meetings make it possible for some people to defraud individuals and steal their money by tempting them to invest in an unreal project. Taking part in
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 training which is not practical and realistic and persuading people by tempting advertisements are the other disadvantages of
so-called phenomenon
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the so-called phenomenon
. To sum up, I think that Online
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 trainings and meetings confer us a wide range of advantages which.
crossing
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Crossing
 the boundaries of
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 and distance, as well as, improving the economy all around the
world
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 are the most noticeable one of them. Of course, individuals have to make use of
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occurence
an event that happens
occurrence
 vigilantly.

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