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Obesity is a serious problem in many countries, especially in rich countries. Discuss ways to solve the problem. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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It is true, that overweight became a huge issue for the
last
 couple decades. Mostly it has influenced people from reach and developed countries. Let us discuss the
problem
 and try to find some solutions for decreasing
this
 issue and keep residents more healthy.
Firstly
, in my opinion, the main reason of obesity it is
unthelthy
not in or exhibiting good health in body or mind
unhealthy
 food
such
 us
fastfood
Suggestion
fast food
, french fries and soda drink. In developed
countries it
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countries, it
 is so much popular and
cheap so
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cheap, so
 people allow to eat
fastfood
Suggestion
fast food
 every
day
.
For example
, when humans
is
Suggestion
are
 a very busy during the
day
, and in the evening coming back to home and,
ofcourse
Suggestion
of course
, have not time and
pover
possession of controlling influence
power
 for cooking the dinner, so they just choose
easy
Suggestion
the easiest
 way and buy
fastfood
Suggestion
fast food
.
As a
result after
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result, after
day
 by
day
 eating burgers, fries and drinking pubs during the couple years, they possibly can get
obesity
Suggestion
obese
 and, in additional, problems with heart or
worce
(comparative of 'bad') inferior to another in quality or condition or desirability
worse
was
 cancer.
Secondly
, another
couse
give rise to; cause to happen or occur, not always intentionally
cause
case
course
 of
overweight there
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overweight, there
 are not enough level of moving activity and physical
exersises
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercises
exercise
,
becouse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 most residents of urban countries spend their
day
incide
internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
inside
 the offices.
As a result
, they possibly can get problems with healths too.
However
, I suppose, for reducing
this
problem
 government should decrease
amount
Suggestion
the amount
 of advertising of
fastfood
Suggestion
fast food
 companies on TV and media and increase
emount
a quantity of money
amount
 of sports facilities in big cities. In conclusion, the
overweight it
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overweight, it
 is a really big and
huge
Suggestion
a huge problem
problem
 for all the people and their healths around the world, but if provide some methods for solving
this
problem
, in coming years it possible take under control.
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