Obesity is a serious problem in many countries, especially in rich countries. Discuss ways to solve the problem. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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It is true, that overweight became a huge issue for the

last

couple decades. Mostly it has influenced people from reach and developed countries. Let us discuss the

problem

and try to find some solutions for decreasing

this

issue and keep residents more healthy.

Firstly

, in my opinion, the main reason of obesity it is

unthelthy

not in or exhibiting good health in body or mind

unhealthy

food

such

fastfood

Suggestion

fast food

, french fries and soda drink. In developed

countries it

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countries, it

is so much popular and

cheap so

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cheap, so

people allow to eat

fastfood

Suggestion

fast food

every

day

For example

, when humans

Suggestion

are

a very busy during the

day

, and in the evening coming back to home and,

ofcourse

Suggestion

of course

, have not time and

pover

possession of controlling influence

power

for cooking the dinner, so they just choose

easy

Suggestion

the easiest

way and buy

fastfood

Suggestion

fast food

As a

result after

Accept comma addition

result, after

day

eating burgers, fries and drinking pubs during the couple years, they possibly can get

obesity

Suggestion

obese

and, in additional, problems with heart or

worce

(comparative of 'bad') inferior to another in quality or condition or desirability

worse

was

cancer.

Secondly

, another

couse

give rise to; cause to happen or occur, not always intentionally

cause

case

course

overweight there

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overweight, there

are not enough level of moving activity and physical

exersises

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercises

exercise

becouse

for the reason that; on account of

because

most residents of urban countries spend their

day

incide

internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of

inside

the offices.

As a result

, they possibly can get problems with healths too.

However

, I suppose, for reducing

this

problem

government should decrease

amount

Suggestion

the amount

of advertising of

fastfood

Suggestion

fast food

companies on TV and media and increase

emount

a quantity of money

amount

of sports facilities in big cities. In conclusion, the

overweight it

Accept comma addition

overweight, it

is a really big and

huge

Suggestion

a huge problem

problem

for all the people and their healths around the world, but if provide some methods for solving

this

problem

, in coming years it possible take under control.

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