Many people believe that hierarchy developed on basis of cast followed since thousand of years its the right way to run the society. Up to what extent do you agree?

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Tons of individual feel that there should be superior

cast

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and lower

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cast which

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cast, which

is practised for generations is the correct way for the society to evolve. In my

opinion I

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opinion, I

believe that

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is an out-dated and unfair treatment which was used during pre-historic times by tyrants.

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method of higher and lower

cast

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was formed by dishonest rulers and administrators or the governments of ancient times where having slaves was

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a common thing

and was thought as

issue

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an issue

of prestige

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But today

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is considered a human rights violation in the modern society and

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type of thought process has no place in the current technology

world

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where most people have respect to their fellow human

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Another point I must make is that

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If I want to

immigrate

leave one's country of residence for a new one

emigrate

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a third world country

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country

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and live in a

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world

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or developed

country

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like let's

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like, let's

say United States of America

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In the current

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world I

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world, I

would be accepted by the

country

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and

it's

of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

its

people if I obliged to immigration laws of the

country

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and have proper documents which meets their immigration criteria

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I will not have any concern and I will be allowed to live freely

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I want to live

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I would be welcomed

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I am sure that I would be adopted as a citizen with equal rights and would never be discriminated because of my race,

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belief or colour in the modern

world

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is the current situation positive situation in current

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due to civilisation. To

conclude I

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conclude, I

must say I strongly believe that all

cast

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systems and inequality should be abolished by the governments of all the nations in the

world

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I believe there is no support for

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kind of idiotic

beliefs there

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beliefs, there

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I think organisations like

United Nations

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the United Nations

can help to change the mindset of the backward thinking people if they do exist in

current

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the current world

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by having awareness programs from grassroots

level which

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level, which

can be incorporated into

school systems

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the school systems

of most countries so that each individual know their

right

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rights

and responsibilities to fellow human and the society.

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view is that hierarchy

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the basis of

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cast

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the cast

is discrimination and all kinds

cast

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discrimination should not be tolerated and should be subjected severe punishments must be enforced against

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actions by the law enforcement agencies of their respective countries

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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