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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

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 of all, I would like to say that computers take quite an important part in our lives nowadays. We need a
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computer almost
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computer, almost
 in every type of business from engineering to health.
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, computers help us
with
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by
 being a social person.
On the other hand
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, computers do not have a long history.
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, when I have my
first
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computer
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 in the 2000s, I
was
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have been
 just a student in primary school. Before I met the computers, I had thought that computers are very exciting, especially unbelievable.
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, it was an amazing situation to have a
computer
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 in those days.
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, I always think that we will
use
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 different technological devices that we never imagine in the future.
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, it can be flying cars or maybe can be quite small computers that people can take with them as a watch on their hands. Mainly, computers have a lot of benefits to work, communicate and have fun.
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, it can be harmful to people. Sometimes we forget to get in touch with our parents and friends because of computers.
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, we do not take the time to do something alone. I do not find friendships near so real nowadays. Because all people prefer to
use
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 a
computer
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 to contact
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with
 others,
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, we are becoming unsocial and alone day by day. It is very important and emotional for me to talk to my friends face to face. Unfortunately, we should be more suspicious of technology, particularly computers and mobile phones. To summarise, we should
use
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 computers for working or studying
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 of
use
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 for communicating with our friends and family.
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, the results of
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 situation can be more dangerous.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Smart traffic management
  • AI (Artificial Intelligence)
  • Machine learning
  • Personalized treatment
  • Virtual classrooms
  • AI tutors
  • Smart homes
  • Energy consumption
  • Grocery shopping automation
  • Data analysis
  • Decision-making assistance
  • Efficiency
  • Mainstream adoption
  • Predictive algorithms
  • Personalization
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