some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters ( such as food, clothe and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individual s who only think about their own wishes. other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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decisions
would make them arrogant and selfish or it is significant about matters that influence them. I would lean towards the latter as I believe that Use synonyms
children
can benefit from making Use synonyms
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children
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that all
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children
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Secondly
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due to
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open to criticism and opposing views.
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, there are several benefits for youngsters in learning how to make Linking Words
decisions
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decisions
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decisions
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children
need to be given enough freedom to learn important skills which will be essential for their future.Use synonyms
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