The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.
The chart illustrates the frequency of
trips
taken by children aged from 5 to 12 from 1990 to 2019 either by car,
bus
, cycling or walking to the school and back.
Overall
, it can be depicted that children preferred to walk to and from school,
while
almost
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equal number of
trips
were taken by cycling,
bus
or walking and
bus
both.
Whereas
in 1990
where
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car
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was relatively the less chosen mode of transport, it changed significantly in 2019, as it became the most preferred choice rather than walking as seen in 1990. In 1990, walking dominated the choice of travel with around 12
millions
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taken per year.
However
, children chose to ride the cycles, take the
bus
or even walk to school or back with each grazing around 6
million
trips
taken that year.
However
,
journey
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done by car was at the minimum with only 4
million
trips
taken annually. The tables were turned in 2019, with around 11.5
millions
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trips
per year, launching as the most preferred choice for travel,
whereas
walking faced
decline
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to almost half
to
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initial
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value to almost 6
millions
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million
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trips
. Not only walking, other modes
such
as cycling, walking,
bus
or walking and
bus
both saw a relative crunch as numbers went down to almost 2
million
for cycling, less than 4
million
for walking and
bus
and at
last
, nearly 5
million
trips
per annum for
bus
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the bus
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words trips, bus, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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