some people say that teachers should be paid according to how their students learn. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

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are many numbers of people who think that educators should get
salary according
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salary, according
to numbers of
students
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students'
student
student's
performance. I agreed, that
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a wise and trusted guide and advisor
mentors
monitors
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are getting
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the money
due to experience and working hours.
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, students result
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more important
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then
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than
everything.
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, Nowadays, teachers are getting
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a high paid job
high paid jobs
around the world. If
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the Government
will introduce
new policy
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a new policy
, in which educators going to have salary just because of
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this teachers
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these teachers
this teacher
will put more efforts on students. Eventually, learners will get
good score
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a good score
good scores
and teachers will feel
more satisfaction
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more satisfied
.
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,
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a wise and trusted guide and advisor
mentors
monitors
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will
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showoff
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show off
their capabilities towards pupils. Only teachers can
intriduce
cause to come to know personally
introduce
new ways of learning as well,
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, they know how to solve a math question with different
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.
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Secondly
, some students do not focus on studies and repeat one class multiple times. In
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condition only a true guider can help them out.
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, guiders performance is
propotional
properly related in size or degree or other measurable characteristics; usually followed by 'to'
proportional
to learners. Teachers
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can motivate their students so in result they will get
good score
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a good score
. Some students do not learn much but teachers are getting their fixed amount which is not a good gesture regarding a respectable vocation.
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, teachers should pay according their passing students percentage.
This
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idea will bring a revolution in modern time. When teachers will put more
efoorts
earnest and conscientious activity intended to do or accomplish something
efforts
effort
their pupils will get
motivate
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motivated
by their
mantors
a wise and trusted guide and advisor
mentors
mentor
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