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Life now is better than it was 100 years ago. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statment? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

#life #years #statment #reason
Some people believe that ancient
life
 was better than at that moment, while others tend to newest
life
 is more useful. I am
inclined believe that
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inclined to believe that
this
time
 is really useful and more comfortable than old century. On the one side, ı will argue that newest
time
 has more advantages than
last
time
.
This
 is because
technology
provide
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provides
 quick transportation and
modern communication device
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a modern communication device
 which are helped our
life
 more relax and comfort. Take
internet
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internet, for
for instance
, İnternet has leapt to people
life
last
 30 years, which is
quit
to a degree (not used with a negative)
quite
 useful for reaching information
such
 as by Google or by others website. Advantages of modern
time
 are countless. Think about if the internet had not invented during
this
time
, probably, our
life
 would have less developed. On the other side, a hundred years
ago unfortunately
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ago, unfortunately
, some useful modern
technology
 things did not invent,
such
 as
plan
an aircraft that has a fixed wing and is powered by propellers or jets
plane
,
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,
bus,
supperfast
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supper fast
 train
,
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,
phone, electronic equipment (which is aided us to do housework
,
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,
to illustrate
,
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,
dishes
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dish
 machine
,
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,
vacuum cleaner
,
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,
iron, washing machine things like that
)
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)
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 am going to give an example, which is
journey
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a journey
the journey
. A hundred years ago, people were riding a horse to transport somewhere to
anothers
any of various alternatives; some other
another
instead
 of
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 by
plan
an aircraft that has a fixed wing and is powered by propellers or jets
plane
 or by bus etc.
Absulately
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Absolutely
, it is clearly understandable, riding horse was
waste
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a waste
 of
time
 and it was really unhealthy. To sum up
,
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,
Although
 some people do not recognize
advantages
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the advantages
 of
space era
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the space era
,
human’s
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a human’s life
life
 is getting well during
last
 one century
,
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,
with modern
technology
. In my opinion, if the
technology
is grow
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is growing
is grown
grows
well
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well, such
such
this
 moment, likely a hundred years later our grandchild will hate
this
 section
time
.
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